When Albert woke up,he felt a strong resia(power)coming from his sword.Than it made sense,he got hid sprite.He left the house,went to soul reaper form and got his captain jacket.At first he wanted to see Tim,but he may still be mad,so he went ro the soul sociaty.There,12 of the captains,Gilbert, and the captain commander,Yamamoto,saw him enter the door."Captian Yamamoto,i have found my weapon." "I see,than let put it to the test."Yamamoto bring in Squad Captain 11:Kenpachi Zaraki.The two star at each eye,though Kenpachi was not interest in him."Hey,don't die on me,kid."Albert attack,but Kenpachi easly block it with his hand.Than he try harder,faster attack,but he keep blocking his attack."Is that all you got.Than it my turn."With on swing,Albert dodge,but the attack cause the floor to become a hole.(No,how can i defect him.)Than suddendly,his mind was place in a black and white world.(What...).Than a Dragon with both darkness and light appeared."you want power,than use it."Back at the fight,Albert than release a great reasia That Kenpachi finally pay attactio."Come,Dark and Light,Yang Ying Dragon."Than his blade became a two blades.One was dark and one was light,and both had a symbol of the dragon."Finally,a real battle.Let get started."Kenpachi came in,but than Albert use the power of darkness to trap him,while the light blind hin.Than fire the power of light and dark from his sword to Kenpachi.Kenpachi got up,but was stop by Yamamoto."Well job,welcome to the 13 Capt."Gilbert was proud that his best friend of join the captain rank.Now he and Albert can work together as a team.Albert was so,happy,he wanted to talk about this to his master,But hours has past,and his master was gone.Behind him was a dark figure with a evil smile on his face."Good,the weapon work,now for the plan."Mean while,Andrew notice something different about the weapon."Hey,how did you get that weapon,"Andrew ask."Umm...well,i do not know.It must have happen when i was sleep."Andrew kept a eye on the weapon.
For years,he had slay Hollows,got the repected of his squad and lieutenant of squad 9,and made a friend from the human world,Ichigo.But than he felt sad that he hadn't seen his old friend,Tim for a vert long time.But than,a light was coming from all caption's homes,and his sword was in pain.His sprite,the dragon,being to break and a smoke came.In his shock was a teenagr girl in it place."Huh,wh.where am i."Albert had no idea what just happen.Than,an unknown person,wearing a white cloaked,had black hair."Who the hell are you." "I am Nar."
good update. Again you might to read through it again. Still have a few more typos.
Not bad. Unknownly you touched on a theory of mine about zanpaktous. Since you said that there are 13 captains but not specifc on who they are, How about the capt of squad 3 be Captain Gilbert(zanpaktou the one i put out on a deviation)? And the Captain of squad 9 be Captain Albert (Quincy when he was alive so his bow is his zankaptou)? The two were friends in life and through well Gilbert's uniqueness of becoming capt they still have some faint memories of their past. Just ideas as add ons. Anyway good start, but you might want to go back through. You have a lot of type-o.
Thank you about this,but i do not want to be a Quincy.Noy much of a fan of them.
if you want you can use me and nar in your story